Paint Me A Picture

Written by Jean Fritz

Compare these two paragraphs:

“I rented a room in an old building on Broadway. The room was dark, and had not been occupied for many years. Dust and spiderwebs were hanging from every wall and corner. I went uprepparttar stairs, and did not see a cobweb because ofrepparttar 139420 darkness. It hit me inrepparttar 139421 face; it was creepy.”

“I took a large room, far up Broadway, in a huge old building whose upper stories had been wholly unoccupied for years until I came. The place had long been given up to dusts and cobwebs, to solitude and silence. I seemed groping amongrepparttar 139422 tombs and invadingrepparttar 139423 privacy ofrepparttar 139424 dead, that first night I climbed up to my quarters. Forrepparttar 139425 first time in my life a superstitious dread came over me; and as I turned a dark angle ofrepparttar 139426 stairway and an invisible cobweb swung its slazy woof in my face and clung there, I shuddered as one who had encountered a phantom.”

The first paragraph accurately describesrepparttar 139427 setting;repparttar 139428 second takes you there, and puts you smack inrepparttar 139429 middle ofrepparttar 139430 action. You see, feel and sense everything thatrepparttar 139431 narrator has experienced. The difference betweenrepparttar 139432 two lies inrepparttar 139433 use of powerful adjectives and adverbs. Effective use of descriptive words allows your readers to paint a mental picture, and transmutes them from passive recipient to active participant.

The English language is redolent with adjectives and adverbs, each of which imparts subtle shadings torepparttar 139434 objects or actions they describe. Yet, writers tend to stick torepparttar 139435 familiar. Inrepparttar 139436 process, their manuscripts lack verve and allow reader interest to wane.

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F.A.Q's About Mysterious Chills and Thrills for Kids Galley Copies

Written by LH Publications and Productions

On Laura Hickey's latest book release: Mysterious Chills and Thrills

1. What's a galley copy?

A galley copy is a preview ofrepparttar is not for re-sale and has grammar and other errors inrepparttar 139370 book. Galley copies should not be re-sold because they aren'trepparttar 139371 real deal.

2. Why might I see/find a galley copy?

It's part of Laura's presentation on her book. Galley copies are given out at presentations for kids to show them howrepparttar 139372 book is going to turn out and also shows kidsrepparttar 139373 changes made torepparttar 139374 galley book forrepparttar 139375 finished product. They are no way, shape or form intended for re-sell...only show.

Galley copies are also sent to book reviewers with a note stating thatrepparttar 139376 copy they have is a galley and thatrepparttar 139377 finish product does not containrepparttar 139378 same mistakes asrepparttar 139379 copy they have. Sometimes a reviewer may forget that this isrepparttar 139380 case and a review may contain information thatrepparttar 139381 book needs editing. Rest assurerepparttar 139382 finish product is edited correctly.

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