by Karon Thackston © 2002 http://www.copywritingcourse.comIt’s about 7:00am and time to start my day. While my exact routine varies, one of
first things I always do is check email. As
flood rolls in, I have my finger poised on
delete button… aimed and ready to fire. But then something catches my eye.
On this morning, I decided to take a closer look at one email in particular. That led me to also lend a critical eye to some other ads as well. So below, I’ll give you my evaluation of a few of
many email ads I’ve received… which ones got my attention, which ones I just rolled my eyes at… and why.
Attention Getter
Here’s one that is well targeted, indeed! The headline read: “Inquiry About Becoming An Affiliate.” That got my attention because my copywriting course does have an affiliate program. I’m always interested in adding new affiliates to
group. So I read on.
Part of
message is below:
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Good morning. I would like to inquire about possibly working with you and your company on an affiliate basis.
My company maintains a fresh, 100%, opt-in email database exceeding 15,000,000 qualified consumers. These consumers have specifically requested to receive purchase information regarding your product(s) or service(s).
If you're interested, I would be glad to speak with you about a cost-per-action (CPA) email campaign that WILL make additional sales and generate alternative revenue.
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While
generic line about my product(s) or service(s) let me know immediately that this was a “canned” ad, it still gave me something to think about. Did I respond? Yes! Why? If I could get
copywriting course in front of over 15,000,000, and pay
same affiliate commission I was paying anyway, what would I have to lose?
Rolling My Eyes
However, among
pile of emails were some real duds. I must get 10 of these ridiculous emails a week. You’ve no doubt seen them, too. They say something like “I joined this program a few months ago and promptly forgot about it.” Oh please!
Why did I roll my eyes at this one? While it started off good, it wasn’t punchy enough to get me to respond right away. That’s no major crime. It often takes repeated exposure of
same message to get a good response. But… when you get
exact same message from several different people 3 or 4 times a day – you find out quickly that this is an overused ad, not a personal recommendation.