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"Open your eyes
day you arrive and believe everything you see. Our world is in constant flow and a stiff current of excitement and discovery pull you along."
"Greater Phoenix is everything from shopping in world-class boutiques to dining that’s equally up to task. It’s lodging that may ease your body, but never relents on
imagination. And without a doubt, there’s so many entertainment options, your agenda will swell with
energy of a true cosmopolitan city- tempered by years of individuality and originality."
So while a stiff current of excitement pulls you along, your agenda will swell with energy. Yeah baby!
Destination Phoenix? I don’t think so.
I’d rather curl up on my sofa with a good catalog and wrap myself in a 5-lb chocolate triple cream butter pudding guilt-free hunk of chenille. Yum.
Tips to improve
copy on your site. 1. Read your copy out loud before you commit to putting it on your site. Yes, every word.
2. If your writing skills aren’t "up to task," hire a professional, or at least get somebody who can edit your text.
3. If it sounds like "BS" to you, it will sound like "BS" to your readers.
4. Less is more, especially on
web.

Barry Harrison is the author of "REDiTIPS" eMarketing Newsletter and a partner in Resolve Digital, Web Strategies for the Real World. Engaging Web design Effective Internet Marketing Essential Content Management Tools Visit his site at http://www.resolvedigital.com or mailto:barry@resolvedigital.com