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Remember that tension, like all techniques, is merely another tool for making your writing more vivid and interesting to read. However, if you do use it, you must make it clear to your readers that
events you are describing have some relation to your study topic. If not, they will be confused, will have to re-read to make sense of it and may end up feeling irritated enough to stop reading.
The words and phases often used to build up tension include: intimidated; heart pounded; ferocity. Thus, tension and suspense is built up so that metaphorically, we hold out breath impelled to read on to find out “what happens next.”
How to edit your personal statement for university submission
When you’ve finished
actual writing, what do you do? Well, for a start, don’t be in a hurry to send off your personal statement before checking it. Few, if any, experienced writers never need to revise their work. Some do as they proceed but most will get their first Personal Statement draft down on paper without worrying too much how it’s written, and then, when it’s finished, go over it, pruning, polishing and tightening
general content. Therefore, this section is about how to edit
personal statement. It is advisable to check
following:
•That you haven’t been over-lavish with adjectives and adverbs. If you find you have, customer some of
former and, where possible, exchange
latter for stronger verbs. •Threat you haven’t used clichés or hackneyed phrases bit have found fresh images always of describing yourself in
best possible light. •Make sure you haven’t constantly used
same word in
same paragraph. This can be very irritating to
admissions officer and it only needs a little more thought to re-word or, very often, it can be omitted without affecting
sense. A thesaurus is useful for finding alternative words. •Make sure your spelling and grammar and impeccable. If in doubt, consult a dictionary and/ or grammar book or ask someone whose knowledge of English your trust to read this through for you. Alternatively, send your personal statement to Get Into Uni Oxbridge editors http://www.getintouni.com who will edit this for you – to perfection. •Make sure you haven’t used over long, unwieldy sentences or paragraphs. If you have you must break these up. •That you’ve started your personal statement with a powerful introduction so this captures your reader’s attention – straight away. •That your structure is easy to follow and that each sentence hooks into
next line. •That you finish with your future career goals.
A key advantage is to use a professional to edit and improve your personal statement. If, however you are working in isolation and do not have that advantage, be wary of allowing family or friends to read and comment on it. For one thing, an outside will be objective and critical: they may be full of praise or go to
other extreme so far as style, at least, is concerned.
Long before you have reached
point of revision, however, it is important that you personal statement is intended as a selling tool for you to gain entry to your chosen university. If you wish to interest
reader it is important that you are your own critic. You will need to prune and polish, check grammar and spelling, take another look at your style: in fact, you may need to re-write your first few sentences to ensure your personal statement is powerful and will capture your readers attention instantly. A great way to help with this is to read sample personal statements. http://www.getintouni.com/samples these samples will give you a clear idea of how you may improve your opening.
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Elaine Millward is founder of Get Into Uni Limited. Get Into Uni Oxbridge educated editors help you research, structure, write, present and produce your personal statement. itouni and leads workshops and writes articles on the subject. Visit Get Into Uni: http://www.getintouni.com