Dialogue Tags-A Study in Common Errors

Written by Jennifer Turner


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Correct:

"I don't care if you kiss allrepparttar frogs inrepparttar 129302 world, you aren't bringing that toad to my party." Shelly glared, hands on hips.

Conjunction Tags

Incorrect:

"You look lovely in that dress," Biff said, "and I think you're going to berepparttar 129303 belle ofrepparttar 129304 ball."

Although this break is all right occasionally, it should be used with extreme caution. A better approach is to lend depth torepparttar 129305 moment atrepparttar 129306 break.

Correct:

"You look lovely in that dress." Biff leaned closer, his words a whisper against her flesh. "I think you're going to berepparttar 129307 belle ofrepparttar 129308 ball."

Showing Impact

Incorrect:

She wanted to scream, to run for help, but she remained frozen, like a trapped animal. "You killed him for money?"

"Exactly," he said.

"How could you?" She asked as adrenalin rushed movement back into her limbs and she backed away.

Obviously this is an excerpt from a larger scene. Byrepparttar 129309 timerepparttar 129310 reader finds this exchange, they'll be familiar with allrepparttar 129311 players. To add impact to a statement, it's sometimes best to leave a tag off entirely, especially with a two-character exchange.

Correct:

She wanted to scream, to run for help, but she remained frozen, like a trapped animal. "You killed him for money?"

"Exactly."

"How could you?" Adrenalin flooded her limbs and she backed away.

Multiple Tags

Incorrect:

"You have to understand," Sean said as he clenched her wrists tighter. His eyes darkened with a menacing plea as he stated, "He was evil, I had to do it."

In this paragraph, we are firmly in Sean's head byrepparttar 129312 action described inrepparttar 129313 middle, there is no need to explain he is still speaking.

Correct:

"You have to understand." Sean clenched her wrists tighter. His eyes darkened with a menacing plea. "He was evil, I had to do it."

As with any rules in writing, there are always exceptions. However, once you've changed any ofrepparttar 129314 problematic tags in your work to these more active and exciting tags, you'll findrepparttar 129315 pace of your work becomes faster andrepparttar 129316 work overall is much cleaner.



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Maximizing The Effect Of Your Freelancer's Bio

Written by Angela Booth


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==> Don't send a naked bio!

I can't emphasize this enough: keeprepparttar focus onrepparttar 129299 client's needs! Don't send a naked bio - that is, a bio on its own, which you've simply decided to send a business, hoping thatrepparttar 129300 business will have work for you.

This message in a bottle stuff doesn't work. Freelancers get intorepparttar 129301 habit of whizzing their resumes, CVs and bios to anyone they think might be remotely interested in hiring them. Then of course they wonder why there's no response. THERE'S NO RESPONSE BECAUSE PEOPLE WANT TO KNOW WHAT YOU CAN DO FOR THEM, A BIO OR CV ON ITS OWN IS NOT ENOUGH.

Yes, I know I'm shouting, but this is important. Never, ever, send a bio on its own.

=> Your bios' style

Every book you own has a bio ofrepparttar 129302 author, so take a few books off your shelves and studyrepparttar 129303 author bios. Most are short. Novelists' bios mentionrepparttar 129304 writer's interests, partner, children and pets. The bios of non-fiction writers emphasizerepparttar 129305 writer's academic credentials if it's important torepparttar 129306 writer's credibility, orrepparttar 129307 writer's experience inrepparttar 129308 fieldrepparttar 129309 book covers.

So what do you emphasize? This is where your bio's slant comes in. If you're sending a mini-proposal, emphasize your experience/qualifications/ interest inrepparttar 129310 business's industry. See why you need many different bios, andrepparttar 129311 confidence to crank them out quickly?

==> HELP! I haven't got any experience!

Freelance consultants in areas like graphic design, financial services, and management have employment experience to draw on, so this plaintive yodel usually comes from freelance writers.

A lack of experience in a specific area worries new freelance writers, and it shouldn't. You're a writer. You can create SAMPLES of your writing capabilities anytime, to order. Write a sample, and hey presto, just like magic, you've got experience.

I write for several editorial agencies, and often they'll send out messages to their stable of writers asking for a 200 word bio, and a work sample for a particular job. It takes me about an hour, research included, to crank out a fresh sample.

This is where a Web site or blog (Web log) is important. It gives you instant credibility, because you can refer people to it to check out your work samples. And as explained, those work samples don't need to be work that you were paid to do.

=> Where to use your bios

Your longest bio, of no more than 200 words, can be posted on your Web site. You can also use it in a presentation folder, with a photo, that you give or send to clients. It's also appropriate to use this long bio in a media kit.

You can send your 100 word bio to editorial and other agencies, so that they have some information about you on file.

The 50 word bio isrepparttar 129312 one you'll use most. Tack it onto direct mail letters, and mini-proposals that you send to companies.

Your short 20 word bio is ideal as a signature file --- a few lines that you tack on torepparttar 129313 end of your email messages. You email program will take on your sig automatically; readrepparttar 129314 Help file to see how to set one up.

If you haven't created a bio yet, do it today. Your bios are a vital freelancing tool.

***Resource box: if using, please include*** Veteran multi-published author and copywriter Angela Booth crafts words for your business --- words to sell, educate or persuade. E-books and e-courses on Web site. FREE ezines for writers and small biz: http://www.digital-e.biz/

Writer, journalist and author Angela Booth has been writing for print and online venues for over 25 years. She also writes copy for businesses.


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